All About English Creative Writing
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The Alternative Story:
Hi optimistforum,[quote]Part 2
Hello, can someone please approve the following answers:
Notice the following
(A) Shouting as they advanced, the soldiers stormed the enemy stronghold.
(B) Shouting as they advanced, the enemy stronghold was stormed by the soldiers.
The first of these groups is a good sentence; the second is not. Can you tell why?
For questions starting with the continuous form of a verb ('ing' form),
the person responsible for the action (that
appears in the 'ing' form) must appear after the comma in
the sentence.
Always check to see if the noun appearing after the comma is
indeed the one doing the action found in the beginning of the
sentence.
Correct example:
Running home, I fell down. - 'I' am the
one responsible for the action of 'running home'.
Wrong example:
Running home, the bus knocked into
me. - This statement is wrong as the bus is not responsible for
the action of running home.
Hence, sentence given in part B is wrong as 'the enemy stronghold'
appears after the comma meaning that the enemy
stronghold is responsible for the action of 'shouting'
which does not make sense.
[quote]From the following, write the good sentences only (my answers at bottom page):
1.\tLeaving aside his fork, the gardener wheeled his barrow from the vegetable plot.
2.\tMounting his horse, the messenger rode off at top speed.
3.\tFeeling rested, the journey was resumed by the traveller.
4.\tCycling carelessly down the street, an accident occurred.
5.\tHaving obtained the teacher’s permission, the girls went home.
6.\tHaving bought a ball, a game was played by the boys.
7.\tRounding the bend, the castle was sighted.
8.\tHaving settled with the bully, I continued on my way.
9.\tStrolling through the wood, the boy discovered an unused tunnel.
10.\tMooning at her work, mistakes were made by the girl.
11.\tClosing the gate, the farmer drove the cattle down the lane.
12.\tHaving worked hard, a prize was gained by the girl.
Answers:
1, 2, 5, 8, 9, 11[/quote]In the same way, statements 3, 4, 6, 7, 10 and 12 are wrong
because the person who is responsible for the action (that is in the
'ing' form) is not found after the comma.
Example (no. 12)
'Having worked hard, a prize was gained by the girl'. The
prize did not work hard so the sentence does not make sense.
TAS[/quote]Hi Tas
Again, many thanks for the help on the \"use of the participial form\".
I have another set of \"use of the participial form\" questions, that I need your help on please?
As usual, I will provide my answers - of which I have no confidence:
In the example given below notice that the subject of each sentence is the same. To join these sentences, the verb in the first sentence is changed into a participle, that is, its form ending in \"ing\", and thus the first sentence is made a participial phrase which is connected to the second sentence to make a complete sentence. Notice the comma separating the participial phrase from the rest of the sentence:
Example:
He felt unwell. He went to bed.
Feeling unwell, he went to bed.
1. I felt sorry for the waif. I gave him a florin.
2. The man dived into the sea. The man rescued the boy from drowning.
3. Helen finished her breakfast. Helen set out for school.
4. I arrived early. I had a practice game of tennis.
5. The farmer cut the corn. He put it into stooks.
6. The policeman spun round. He seized the thief's weapon.
7. Mary passed the old house. She heard a strange cry from within.
8. The fireman carried the limp figure over his shoulder. He descended the ladder carefully.
My answers are below:
1. Feeling sorry for the waif, I gave him a florin.
2. Diving into the sea, the man rescued the boy from drowning.
3. Finishing her breakfast, Helen set out for school.
4. Arriving early, I had a practice game of tennis.
5. Cutting the corn, the farmer put it into stooks.
6. Spinning round, the policeman seized the thief's weapon.
7. Passing the old house, Mary heard a strange cry from within.
8. Carrying the limp figure over his shoulder, the fireman descended the ladder carefully. -
looneytunezz:
Hi,Hi TAS,
Your event today was grt! Am really amazed at how your teacher can carry out the event in a busy noisy shopping centre and still get the kids to listen. We like your cool rhythm spelling method especially. My youngest is looking forward to joining your holiday programme :lol:
Mum of looneytunezz
Can I find out what event this was? Is it going to be repeated? -
LadyBug3:
Hi,
Hi,looneytunezz:
Hi TAS,
Your event today was grt! Am really amazed at how your teacher can carry out the event in a busy noisy shopping centre and still get the kids to listen. We like your cool rhythm spelling method especially. My youngest is looking forward to joining your holiday programme :lol:
Mum of looneytunezz
Can I find out what event this was? Is it going to be repeated?
I think it is this programme \"Every Child Can Write\", the information is found in the Happenings section. I also gave some feedback there.
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optimistforum:
Hi optimistforum,
Hi Tas
Thanks for answering this question, and the one in the other thread. I am afraid I do struggle with where to place \"only\" in a sentence.
Re this \"ONLY\" question, it states the following:
Re-write the following sentences, using the word \"only\" in each:
1.\tJohn had three pencils and lost two.
2.\tNo other girl but Ellen was late for school.
3.\tSam was the youngest in his class, as he was seven and all the others were eight or more years old.
4.\tIt rained on Wednesday. Every other day in the week was fine.
5.\tIf you asked me I could have gone with you.
6.\tThere had been two hundred thousand soldiers in the army. But half of them now remained after the battle.
Furthermore, can you please sense-check some more questions too?
Re-write the following, placing the word \"only\" in position in each:
1. Ken has threepence with him.
2. The poor man has one finger on each hand.
3. That tram goes as far as the museum.
4. This pencil cost twopence.
5. In the test Simon failed; but he really wasn't very well.
6. After twenty minutes' cricket, there was one run on the score-board.
7. \"If I had a racing car\", thought Andy, \"I could break the record.\"
8. The notice read, \"Ticket-holders will be admitted.\"
My answers below:
1. Ken has only threepence with him.
2. The poor man has only one finger on each hand.
3. That tram goes only as far as the museum.
4. This pencil cost only twopence.
5. In the test only Simon failed; but he really wasn't very well.
6. After twenty minutes' cricket, there was only one run on the score-board.
7. \"If only I had a racing car\", thought Andy, \"I could break the record.\"
8. The notice read, \"Only ticket-holders will be admitted.\"
Your answers are all correct. Don't worry about the use of
'only'. I think you have no problem with that.
TAS -
optimistforum:
Hi optimistforum,
Example:
He felt unwell. He went to bed.
Feeling unwell, he went to bed.
1. I felt sorry for the waif. I gave him a florin.
2. The man dived into the sea. The man rescued the boy from drowning.
3. Helen finished her breakfast. Helen set out for school.
4. I arrived early. I had a practice game of tennis.
5. The farmer cut the corn. He put it into stooks.
6. The policeman spun round. He seized the thief's weapon.
7. Mary passed the old house. She heard a strange cry from within.
8. The fireman carried the limp figure over his shoulder. He descended the ladder carefully.
My answers are below:
1. Feeling sorry for the waif, I gave him a florin.
2. Diving into the sea, the man rescued the boy from drowning.
3. Finishing her breakfast, Helen set out for school.
4. Arriving early, I had a practice game of tennis.
5. Cutting the corn, the farmer put it into stooks.
6. Spinning round, the policeman seized the thief's weapon.
7. Passing the old house, Mary heard a strange cry from within.
8. Carrying the limp figure over his shoulder, the fireman descended the ladder carefully.
There is no problem with your answers, they are all correct.
TAS -
JayneLL:
Hi,
Hi,LadyBug3:
[quote=\"looneytunezz\"]Hi TAS,
Your event today was grt! Am really amazed at how your teacher can carry out the event in a busy noisy shopping centre and still get the kids to listen. We like your cool rhythm spelling method especially. My youngest is looking forward to joining your holiday programme :lol:
Mum of looneytunezz
Can I find out what event this was? Is it going to be repeated?
I think it is this programme \"Every Child Can Write\", the information is found in the Happenings section. I also gave some feedback there.[/quote]Thank you JayneLL! Your feedback is much appreciated but they have no more space for their programme this weekend. May just pop by though as they say there may be some who do not come and we can take their place or sit in front on the kiddy stools if we dont mind.
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The Alternative Story:
Thank you, Tas, for the sense-checking. It is much-appreciated.
Hi optimistforum,optimistforum:
Example:
He felt unwell. He went to bed.
Feeling unwell, he went to bed.
1. I felt sorry for the waif. I gave him a florin.
2. The man dived into the sea. The man rescued the boy from drowning.
3. Helen finished her breakfast. Helen set out for school.
4. I arrived early. I had a practice game of tennis.
5. The farmer cut the corn. He put it into stooks.
6. The policeman spun round. He seized the thief's weapon.
7. Mary passed the old house. She heard a strange cry from within.
8. The fireman carried the limp figure over his shoulder. He descended the ladder carefully.
My answers are below:
1. Feeling sorry for the waif, I gave him a florin.
2. Diving into the sea, the man rescued the boy from drowning.
3. Finishing her breakfast, Helen set out for school.
4. Arriving early, I had a practice game of tennis.
5. Cutting the corn, the farmer put it into stooks.
6. Spinning round, the policeman seized the thief's weapon.
7. Passing the old house, Mary heard a strange cry from within.
8. Carrying the limp figure over his shoulder, the fireman descended the ladder carefully.
There is no problem with your answers, they are all correct.
TAS
FYI, these questions are taken from 100 Exercises in English Usage (Book 4, 11-12 years); these are very old Primary books that are written by Hodder Education (who also publisand are meant to complement the New First Aid in English). I would heartily recommend them to anyone. -
optimistforum:
[/quote]Thank you, TAS, for the sense-checking.
Hi optimistforum,The Alternative Story:
[quote=\"optimistforum\"]
Example:
He felt unwell. He went to bed.
Feeling unwell, he went to bed.
1. I felt sorry for the waif. I gave him a florin.
2. The man dived into the sea. The man rescued the boy from drowning.
3. Helen finished her breakfast. Helen set out for school.
4. I arrived early. I had a practice game of tennis.
5. The farmer cut the corn. He put it into stooks.
6. The policeman spun round. He seized the thief's weapon.
7. Mary passed the old house. She heard a strange cry from within.
8. The fireman carried the limp figure over his shoulder. He descended the ladder carefully.
My answers are below:
1. Feeling sorry for the waif, I gave him a florin.
2. Diving into the sea, the man rescued the boy from drowning.
3. Finishing her breakfast, Helen set out for school.
4. Arriving early, I had a practice game of tennis.
5. Cutting the corn, the farmer put it into stooks.
6. Spinning round, the policeman seized the thief's weapon.
7. Passing the old house, Mary heard a strange cry from within.
8. Carrying the limp figure over his shoulder, the fireman descended the ladder carefully.
There is no problem with your answers, they are all correct.
TAS
It is much-appreciated.
FYI, these questions are taken from 100 Exercises in English Usage (Book 4, 11-12 years); these are very old Primary books that are written by Hodder Education (and are meant to complement the New First Aid in English). I would heartily recommend them to anyone. -
Hi optimistforum,
No problem
TAS -
Hi TAS,
I have heard a lot about you from various people- my sister-in-law and ex-colleague. They highly recommend your centre for English. I live in Bishan and am thinking of sending my child to your Yishun centre. I would like to ask some questions first. Do you offer trial lessons and also do you allow parents to look at your materials before joining? I am not sure if this is the right place to ask but hope you can help or if any parents know the details to what I asked, I would really appreciate if you could help too, thank you.
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