All About English Creative Writing
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kitty2, thanks for sharing. At the risk of making myself unpopular, I personally think the boy has tried way too hard to impress with vocabulary. Presumably he had dictionary resources to hand and the assistance of a teacher. In focusing on insertion of purple prose rather than precise and effective vocabulary, all sorts of errors have arisen eg cramping, scant, and waterlogged are used wrongly. I prefer good content supported by vocabulary.
Still, a student producing this under exam conditions would score highly. However, it is too lengthy for the PSLE. -
Joy of Learning 111:
I agree with you.kitty2, thanks for sharing. At the risk of making myself unpopular, I personally think the boy has tried way too hard to impress with vocabulary. Presumably he had dictionary resources to hand and the assistance of a teacher. In focusing on insertion of purple prose rather than precise and effective vocabulary, all sorts of errors have arisen eg cramping, scant, and waterlogged are used wrongly. I prefer good content supported by vocabulary.
Still, a student producing this under exam conditions would score highly. However, it is too lengthy for the PSLE. -
I am impressed with the writing. My elder one is only P3 and I wonder if this is the kind of standard expected of a P6? Do most P6 write like this?
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love1001:
I am impressed with the writing. My elder one is only P3 and I wonder if this is the kind of standard expected of a P6? Do most P6 write like this?
No, I don't think so. Unless they have been to some creative writing classes. Many children whom I know write in this manner don't score high in their schools. School teachers probably prefer a more streamlined style of writing (not too flowery) to get the point across and something straight from the children's hearts. -
lee_yl:
My guess is it wasn't written under closed-book testing conditions. If I'm not mistaken, it could be from that centre as some of the phrases look kind of familiar. There is this exercise which I call \"Lego-building\" that requires them to mix and match a plethora of nice phrases listed on the worksheet to fit into each para. This exercise tests their skills in S&T as they may need to change their syntactic structures to make the essay sound more coherent. The second draft will be scrubbed and loaded with flowery sentences and literary devices. Stilted? Perhaps, but that's how the final product is usually likelove1001:
I am impressed with the writing. My elder one is only P3 and I wonder if this is the kind of standard expected of a P6? Do most P6 write like this?
No, I don't think so. Unless they have been to some creative writing classes. Many children whom I know write in this manner don't score high in their schools. School teachers probably prefer a more streamlined style of writing (not too flowery) to get the point across and something straight from the children's hearts.
You can get 1,000 'lab' students producing samples (i.e. their draft 2) of such quality every week.
However, under actual testing conditions (time limit, closed book, zero reference materials, stress), 50% of the flowers could be momentarily forgotten or not applicable to the context, unless you're born a prolific wordsmith with an excellent memory. Then again, even renowned novelists needed several drafts to produce something as near-flawless as this sample. -
kitty2:
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You should ask this friend of yours if her son wrote it (and all others you saw) under closed book conditions.
It's a feat to be able to employ a literary device in almost every sentence during the real PSLE. It is however not impossible when the compo pictures have been discussed/brainstormed in class (i.e. enrichment centre/private tutor). In the exams, you only have 5-10 min to plan.
This student can become our next Catherine Lim liao. -
Employing literary device is not the same as employing them correctly.
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ammonite:
Employing literary device is not the same as employing them correctly.
I wonder how the student even had time to mark out what's what. Obviously it was not written under exam conditions. -
My guess is it wasn't written under closed-book testing conditions. If I'm not mistaken, it could be from that centre as some of the phrases look kind of familiar. There is this exercise which I call \"Lego-building\" that requires them to mix and match a plethora of nice phrases listed on the worksheet to fit into each para. This exercise tests their skills in S&T as they may need to change their syntactic structures to make the essay sound more coherent. The second draft will be scrubbed and loaded with flowery sentences and literary devices. Stilted? Perhaps, but that's how the final product is usually like
You can get 1,000 'lab' students producing samples (i.e. their draft 2) of such quality every week.
However, under actual testing conditions (time limit, closed book, zero reference materials, stress), 50% of the flowers could be momentarily forgotten or not applicable to the context, unless you're born a prolific wordsmith with an excellent memory. Then again, even renowned novelists needed several drafts to produce something as near-flawless as this sample.[/quote]
The 'Lab' refers to that famous expensive lab?
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