The Alternative Story (TAS) - Discussion

[vksmums]

Hi TAS,


I have pmed you regarding the Science Toy making christmas event.

[The Alternative Story]

vksmums:

Hi TAS,


I have pmed you regarding the Science Toy making christmas event.

Hi vksmums,

We have replied you

TAS

[2DMommy]

May I know how many Vols do you have for the creative writing book and what Vol is for what standards?

[Laurenwkids]

Hi TAS,


May I know where I can find more information about the Science Toy making? Sorry just came back from overseas and happened to see what people are signing up for at your thread.

[JayneLL]

The Alternative Story:

JayneLL:

Hi TAS,


Please reserve 2 slots for me for the 25 dec for Science Making Toy event.
Tks.

Hi JayneLL,

Can you pm or email us your children's names? We have reserved
2 slots for them, which timing are you looking at? 2-4 pm or
5-7 pm?

TAS

Hi TAS,

I have emailed you. Thanks for replying even when you guys are on break! :celebrate:

[clblinym]

Hi, TAS,


When reading your book with DS, I have doubt with the following
phrase ( the remains of my father’s precious vase on the ground)

The full sentence is on P.6

The sinking feeling in my stomach grew (main clause) as I sat on the floor (subordinate clause), the remains of my father’s precious vase on the ground.

Can you explain the function of "the remains of my father’s precious vase on the ground’?

Thank you .

Regards,
Amy

[The Alternative Story]

2DMommy:

May I know how many Vols do you have for the creative writing book and what Vol is for what standards?

Hi 2DMommy,

As of now, we have produced volume 1 of the creative writing book.
It is more suitable for Primary 3 - 6 pupils.

TAS

[The Alternative Story]

Laurenwkids:

Hi TAS,


May I know where I can find more information about the Science Toy making? Sorry just came back from overseas and happened to see what people are signing up for at your thread.

Hi Laurenwkids,

We have left you a pm previously, hope you got it.

TAS

[The Alternative Story]

JayneLL:

Hi TAS,

I have emailed you. Thanks for replying even when you guys are on break! :celebrate:

Hi JayneLL,

We have replied you

TAS

[The Alternative Story]

clblinym:

Hi, TAS,


When reading your book with DS, I have doubt with the following
phrase ( the remains of my father's precious vase on the ground)

The full sentence is on P.6

The sinking feeling in my stomach grew (main clause) as I sat on the floor (subordinate clause), the remains of my father's precious vase on the ground.

Can you explain the function of \"the remains of my father's precious vase on the ground'?

Thank you .

Regards,
Amy

Hi Amy,

The use of such a sentence is one that is use to imply that the
cause of the person having the sinking feeling in his stomach is
him breaking his father's precious vase.

In writing, you do not have to be explicit all the time because at times
it takes away from the writing, making it seem a little forced.

Example:

The sinking feeling in my stomach grew as I sat on the floor. I knew
I was going to be in trouble as I had broken my father's precious vase.

Here, the cause and effect relationship is clear, it is clear
that you have that sinking feeling because you broke the vase.
However, it seems a little stilted as compared to:

The sinking feeling in my stomach grew as I sat on the floor,
the remains of my father's precious vase on the ground.

In writing, there is no right or wrong at times
(both the sentences given above are grammatically right),
it is not so much of a science but more of an art.
Hence, certain sentence structures like this needs to be
felt as you read the story. When every sentence is uniformed and the
meaning is very obvious, at times it takes away from the writing
rather than add to it.

That is why writing can be more difficult to master, however if the
children are exposed to a lot of creative writing and read a fair bit,
they would be able to internalize the different styles of writing.

Hope this helps.

TAS